"Thousand Voices"

05-05-2006, 07:28 PM

"Thousand Voices"

"Look at all the happy people-
Now look at the inside of me.
Blending in so descretely,
Alone like a ship out to sea.

Surrounded and alone...
Stormy oceans roll...
Howling winds moan...

A thousand voices-
Whispering to me.
A thousand voices-
Screaming.

Bleeding, bleeding
(Whispering to me)
Bleeding, bleeding
(Screaming)

A thousand people,
A thousand voices,
A thousand blood drops-

Screaming."

Just a little poem about isolation.

Selene_nightsky · 05-06-2006, 10:06 PM

I thought that was ever well put and it was very deep. It described aloneness to such a great degree that you could feel it and I look forward to reading an others that you write.
tabby

05-07-2006, 12:04 AM

I love the darker side of poetry. This was very well written!! I too would love to read more!

05-07-2006, 07:19 AM

the darkness in this poem is strong and wants to be set free let it.But for now just love what you wrote it is very good.

05-07-2006, 02:31 PM

Thank you! I do have more poems, but they're lost somewhere in my desk...as soon as I find them, I'll post some.

chaotic xin · 05-10-2006, 02:05 PM

I absolutely love it! It's so dark and cool! It's great and i agree, you should post more poems because you rock at writing them!!

05-10-2006, 02:26 PM

Hmm....I didn't really like this one in particular, but I think you have really good potential. Keep writing and posting, lets see where it goes.

05-10-2006, 04:29 PM

i liked it. you have skill with your rhymes and your assemblage of words and phrases, the mechanics are there, but you can deepen it a little by expanding the concept of isolation. All in all, very good.