I'm gonna go to work tomorrow then jump off a bridge
Ha ha ha ha haaa
Let me stop, these suicidal thoughts

These sad, crazy, mixed up thoughts
Go away, go find another mind to play.
My mind is crowded enough.

With feelings, rejection, aggravation running on high
wanting to die is not easy as pie.
The motivation isn't here
The determination isn't near
and the instrument to my destruction is some where ... over there.

So let me wake up tomorrow and walk pass the bridge
to get hit by a tractor trailer who, last week, hit a deer.
Ha ha ha haaa
Let me stop, these suicidal thoughts

Ristaron

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I like the train of thought aspect. Aside from that, it's a little too crazy for my tastes.

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Arcángel

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I've gotta agree with Rist with regards to how you wrote your poem, using your train of thought. Personally, its a little dark for my tastes but, I love the way it was written. I the fact that the train of thought scheme gives it a more personal feel to it.

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Excuse me blue eyes
May I have your name? number?
Wait a minute, you're what?!

Are you serious?
You're too beautiful to be,
A damn lesbian