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Chad: Follow or Die
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09-30-2007, 08:47 PM
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Scary...yet artistic...I think...
A tortured mind
Isolated events Thoughts i cannot prevent pain that's already there hurt to which i can't compare forgiven, forgotten, left in peace to remember forever an unlikely feast of death, desire, and pain without measure forget even the mention of pleasure scars, welts, thoughts to be forgotten kisses of death and destruction blood abounds in this place nobody remembers your face even the lowliest creature would not call this place home a place surrounded by people yet still so alone ghosts travel these halls blood splatters and all figures of dead girls line each wall we say its horrifying yet secretly delight when we see another annihilate a human life; a light forget the name just describe the fate isolated events in this desolate place its here that I'm mired i keep myself in this frame of pain and diminished desire i have nothing else the rest has expired leave me to it this fearful place you can't take me out I've been chased its all in my mind but you can see it as well its like looking into the depths of hell alone defenselessly, captors come they say that its over my last bell has rung long goodbyes are too difficult if i tell you I'm gone its not your fault physically always there but in my mind i have despaired mentally broken after so many years leaving you behind with so many tears they classify me as insane they say I'll never be the same but don't give up I'm still here i traverse these corridors I've built in my mind of death and gore and suddenly i long for more I'm coming back be ready please thank you for helping me up off my knees my mind has been tortured love created images that horrifyingly please images of such dreadful death you look at me so bereft my innocence isn't there because it's missing you find it harder to care you loved the little girl in me find it harder to deal with the teen suicidal, yes I've been called that but is it any worse in the chair in which you sat are you judged harshly for helping me out do they blame you for my dementia, you who've only helped if they take you away I'll only recede back to that place of supreme misdeed murder and death hate and desire begin to create another spire in my tower i reside once more demise and lust gore and so much more by my side with no one to save me this time my heart and my mind will surely die. Becca Stone I wrote this a few years ago..not bad for a 14 almost 15 year old..stumbled upon it when reviewing my xanga...hope you enjoyed.
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09-08-2008, 03:03 PM
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...Chase you ARE GOD!...CHASE IS GOD...And this is why Chase is God...oh man you are a GOD Chase!..Chase, you are God.
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09-08-2008, 05:29 PM
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 Formerly known as El Subestimado Mi ma'i, mi amor de mi vida: SpicedSugar Mis hijos: Butterfingered (missing) Mi hermanita: Dancesintheran, my brother-in-law: Edge_Of_Insanity Mi Primita: Keena |
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09-08-2008, 10:23 PM
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Try using punctuation to try to get it to flow better. When I was reading it I found it hard to keep the flow going in my head since I am not the writer and only a reader. You will be surprised by how much a comma or period can make a difference to the reader on understanding the flow.
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