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Old 02-10-2008, 12:02 AM
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Rise of the Nephilim

I'm really not sure about this one. I like the feeling behind it but I couldn't seem to make it rhyme. I just let it flow. I normally try to make a rhyme so in my opinion this isn't very poetic at all but I will just post it and see what everyone says.

Rise of the Nephilim

We are the Nephilim, the children of men
Our fathers committed an unforgivable sin
Each of the watchers took a human for a bride
Now we are born, it's our time to rise

Our fathers taught humans to make weapons of war
Our fathers taught women the tricks of false beauty
The secrets of heaven our fathers revealed
Our fathers have fallen, never again will they rise

Their wings are now tattered, gone forevermore
Their purity tainted, these angels did fall
Sent to be watchers, what have they done?
They turned on their Lord and gave in to lust

We are their children and now we must pay
We are abominations in the eyes of the Lord
He sent a great flood and washed us away
This is out punishment, this is how we pay

We are now cursed to hunger forever
We are now cursed to walk this earth
We cannot escape, in spirit we remain
This is our punishment, trapped on this world

Why must we pay for the sins of angels and men?
What have we done to evoke the vengeance of a God?
The Lord has forsaken us for what we don't know
We grow so bitter, we don't understand

We shall side with Lucifer and steal the great throne
Destroy the one who has caused us great pain
We shall rule and serve justice to all those he harmed
We shall fight for eternity until freedom is ours
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Old 02-10-2008, 12:08 AM   #2 (permalink)
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In my humble opinion, a poem doesn't have to rhyme to be poetic. This is wonderful poem without it. I appreciate the story like quality to it, and the fact that its written in prose only adds to its beauty.
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Thanks.

Glad you both like it.
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I love the first stanza. I absolutely love it.
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