Rate my stories hook;

Twistedflamerr · 03-06-2006, 10:48 PM

To MAKE sure my story does not get stolen I will only post my hook which goes like this:
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I didn't want to die. Fate on the other hand, had a different desideration.

LiQuID~Shadow · 03-08-2006, 12:49 AM

ummm, it seems like that has been overused many times too many.

it gives away a strong theme that will be in the plot. as soon as someone were to read that, they would know how the story would ultimately end.

and thats not fun, is it? nope.

**Fuko** · 03-08-2006, 07:33 AM

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Originally Posted by Twistedflamerr

To MAKE sure my story does not get stolen I will only post my hook which goes like this:
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I didn't want to die. Fate on the other hand, had a different desideration.

I have read it Rob...and it was excellent!

**jennyjones** · 03-08-2006, 07:36 AM

You already sold the movie rights to that one a few times over, didn't you? I could have sworn I saw it!

Twistedflamerr · 03-08-2006, 04:26 PM

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You see, just because he says I didn't want to die, does NOT mean he dies physically dumb-fuck Liquid..

Jesus FUCKING christ, I probably should have mentioned this was in WWII.... RESEARCH veterans, my father and his dad were and I know that when they come back... most of them are, different.

LiQuID~Shadow · 03-08-2006, 06:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Twistedflamerr

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You see, just because he says I didn't want to die, does NOT mean he dies physically dumb-fuck Liquid..

Jesus FUCKING christ, I probably should have mentioned this was in WWII.... RESEARCH veterans, my father and his dad were and I know that when they come back... most of them are, different.

read the rest

"fate... had a different desideration"

that implies death.

03-08-2006, 06:33 PM

I like it its interesing.

**SeaStone** · 11-04-2006, 11:24 PM

Time's Up.