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Chad: Follow or Die
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04-05-2008, 09:51 PM
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Poem, Need feedback plz? =]
Lights up; the sun awakens The world is busy and bright Constant cacophony surrounds my facade My head is swimming in a sea of voices Phrases are spoken softly, barely uttered Passing through me with an air of fondness Others are screamed shrilly Cutting through like knives But there's one strong voice shining through It calms and soothes without effort And my busy world stops spinning The voice brings new colors to my eyes Smooth blues of laughter, love, and friendship appear As the harsh reds of betrayal and pain fade from view And when the sun takes its last breath of the night I know you'll be the only light I see.
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 You danced, you drank, you laughed, you cried, You went to work and said goodbye I lived, I learned, stayed up all night, I'll see you when the time is right again... 
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04-06-2008, 06:33 AM
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At least to me, it feels like a really peaceful poem--how no matter how bad your day has gotten, there's someone out there is the one good thing in your life that can make you make everything alright. But that's just me. *shrugs*
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04-06-2008, 06:43 AM
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You danced, you drank, you laughed, you cried, You went to work and said goodbye I lived, I learned, stayed up all night, I'll see you when the time is right again... |
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04-06-2008, 10:53 AM
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You are aesthetically pleasing,
the reason for which I first noticed in you. And later I found your personality equally pleasing. I also noted your chest to waist ratio is suitable for birthing. Therefore, I think you should live in my house. |
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