Poem I submitted to Reflections program...

Twistedflamerr · 02-23-2006, 06:17 PM

This poem I entered into a reflections program at school.. Made district with honors, but no state..

The General of War

I often wonder why,
Death's touch feels so cold,
I wish to fight, but am averse to try.
Can I refuse death? Am I so bold?
Yes, I can! I'm the General of war!
I'll lead the charge against Death's door.
Now sorrow fills the thoughts of my men.
No matter! It's to war I shall send,
Them one by one and ten by ten,
Marching triumphantly to the end.
Even now, they charge to uncertain fates,
Their destiny bringing them where Death awaits.
In glory, Death takes them without a cry
Although, he shall never conquer their spirits,
I shall often, wonder, why.

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Robert - TwistedFlamerr

02-23-2006, 06:43 PM

good poem man. kinda gave me a chuckle when it was like the men are sad but o well to their deaths they go.

02-24-2006, 12:29 AM

nice...kewl war one i like it

Twistedflamerr · 02-24-2006, 02:56 PM

Yeh.. I generally right songs.. not poetry but its all great... frosted fLAKES ARE MOOOOOORE THAN GOOD! THEIR CRAP!... wrong commercial sorry.

02-28-2006, 04:33 AM

oh....my....god.... that poem was like reading........... death.... that death is on its way to this world...... i loved it...

yea i write poetry too but like..... i havent in a while......... I <3 you guys!!! xoxoxoxoxoxoo
Sonja

02-28-2006, 04:33 AM

oh....my....god.... that poem was like reading........... death.... that death is on its way to this world...... i loved it...

yea i write poetry too but like..... i havent in a while......... I <3 you guys!!! xoxoxoxoxoxoo
Sonja

02-28-2006, 10:01 PM

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Originally Posted by cheer_up_emo_kid000

oh....my....god.... that poem was like reading........... death.... that death is on its way to this world...... i loved it...

yea i write poetry too but like..... i havent in a while......... I <3 you guys!!! xoxoxoxoxoxoo
Sonja

lol...emo...

Twistedflamerr · 02-28-2006, 10:21 PM

LoL Glad you liked it.

03-01-2006, 05:56 PM

I really liked the poem; the speaker's contemplative mood really set the tone, (albeit it he had some crazy mood swings). I really liked the personification of Death too. My only complaint would be that the dramatic situation is not entirely clear, or dramatic, but all in all a great poem.

**Fuko** · 03-02-2006, 03:10 AM

I liked it a lot. Very nice