Our Ecstacy

**SARS-expl0ted** · #1 (**permalink**) 08-05-2008, 06:56 AM

Her tongue dances around finger tips
as his eyes pierce through the ceiling.
This ecstasy feels so righteous,
they can't escape the feeling.
Pulling in and pushing out,
his breath is constantly fleeting.
She gently removes all the things
that she innocently kept from revealing.
That soft, ivory and tasteful skin
the full moon kept her from concealing.
Reflections; none but shadows cast
they passionately enjoy the evening.
Sweat drips from his tensed brow
as he is so close to completing
what was started hours ago
the pleasure is so very pleasing.
She pulls him in and holds him tight
while he slowly calms his breathing.
They stare deep into the other's eyes;
too bad she was only dreaming.

**Opunaya** · 08-05-2008, 06:59 AM

Wow...that was awesome. I...I need to quit reading your poetry.

**SARS-expl0ted** · 08-05-2008, 07:00 AM

How come?

Thank you, a lot. I like knowing that it's somewhat decent. I actually REALLY like this one. I usually think my poetry sucks but this one was amazing.

**Opunaya** · 08-05-2008, 07:05 AM

Because this one is hot and sad. I think all of your poems are great...this one is a little more detailed than the others. This one was very good.

**SARS-expl0ted** · 08-05-2008, 07:12 AM

I wasn't planning on it to be sad. When I write, I just go and I don't think of an ending...this is just how it turned out.

I had another ending to it but this was the first one.
People tell me all of the time that I end my poetry too soon, so when I wrote this version I deleted it and added another stanza but someone I hold in high regards told he liked this version a lot better so I stuck with it.

**Opunaya** · 08-05-2008, 07:23 AM

Hey, it ends when it ends. I never think poetry is ever too short or too long.

**SARS-expl0ted** · 08-05-2008, 08:39 PM

True. Plus, I write to my liking and not someone else's. I mean, I like knowing that others enjoy it but if they don't then oh well.