[I miss]

**SARS-expl0ted** · #1 (**permalink**) 07-24-2008, 01:11 PM

I miss hearing those three small words flow through your parting lips.
I miss your gentle hugs and tender kiss.
When you left, you took my heart miles away with you
but please don't think that I did not want you to.
We are one. A whole of our entirety which we aren't afraid to share.
Pull me back into your loving arms to let me know you're there.
I feel you in my soul as you pierce me with your eyes.
I know this for certain, our love will never die.

This just kind of flew out of me so sorry if it doesn't flow entirely. I think it sounds pretty good but then again I know every time I read over my writing I can always find something I wish to change about it.

**Opunaya** · 07-24-2008, 02:33 PM

This one makes me sad ;-;

**SARS-expl0ted** · 07-24-2008, 04:52 PM

It makes me smile. ^_^

**HeartAttack** · 07-24-2008, 04:58 PM

Sad, but that's the point. Either way, good job - it captures the feeling very nicely

**SARS-expl0ted** · 07-24-2008, 05:02 PM

Thank you.

**Ristaron** · 07-24-2008, 07:02 PM

Well, it's no Sarah McLachlan... but then, what is?

I liked it.

**SARS-expl0ted** · 07-25-2008, 07:13 AM

Was it really that bad? Haha.

I can handle criticism.

**Opunaya** · 07-25-2008, 07:27 AM

I still find it sad. I demand more happy.

**SARS-expl0ted** · 07-25-2008, 08:27 AM

Honestly, what pisses me off is that I can only write if/when I am sad. It makes me so mad. I want to be able to write about happy things but it's rare.

**Opunaya** · 07-25-2008, 09:45 AM

You wrote a silly poem about us and it rocked!!!